Prompt 4: Peer Review #3

Most of my peer edits for this essay when grammatical, however there weren’t that many. I just suggested adding a comma here and there, and changing the location of a period. I also commented on one sentence for them to reread it because when I read it, it was a little choppy and I wasn’t sure what they were trying to say. I looked at their formatting and some parts of their essay were a different size font than the rest, so I just pointed it out to them to make sure everything is the same size font. I also pointed out that they needed a title for their final draft. I did suggest adding some quotes as evidence in two of the paragraphs and to further explain how those pieces of evidence suppose their definition of empathy. In one of their paragraphs, they didn’t really explain how the essay they used as evidence supported their definition, so I suggested that they connect it back with their definition and clarify how it supports it. The only major comment I had for their essay was to add more evidence that backed up their argument and to explain it. I made this comment mostly because there wasn’t enough evidence to support their thesis, but their essay wasn’t the minimum length that was required. Overall, their essay was very good and I had few comments on it. I told them that their argument was clear and easy to follow, and that they did an awesome job.